Draft deliberately authored for exercise, not a provider response.
Rejected: Fix anything in minutes for free.
Reason: unsupported scope, time, price and outcome.
Revised: The coordinator first checks what help is possible.
Rejected: Join hundreds of happy neighbours.
Reason: no attendance or satisfaction evidence.
Revised: Bring one small fabric item.
Timing: read the final spoken text aloud in the intended voice and save the measured duration before assigning exact cut points. No unperformed read-aloud test is claimed.